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SkywalkerRules 02-26-2010 03:22 PM

Love's Death
 
A long time ago, during the Sith-Imperial War,
I saw her. A wondrous, young woman.
Her golden hair swayed in the breeze as she danced,
and her eyes reflected the bright blue skies whenever
she smiled.

This young woman's heart was cheerful as a child;
an angelic voice of hers that echoed through my mind.
Yet, she seemed sadden for the Galaxy.
For me...

She saw me as a hero, not a bounty hunter or rogue.
Her comfort was like no other; a guardian spirit.
Her love was her strength, and nothing, not even a Sith,
could take that love away from her.

Now... she is gone from me. I grieve with anger, guilt, and
sadness. But thank the Force, she did not die in vain from a
lightsaber's pierce, a blaster wound, or anything horrible.
But that a deep sleep took her.

The Force be with you Lyna. My love, my friend.
Thank you for leading me to the road of redemption,
and not destruction.

Te Darasuum Mandalor 02-26-2010 05:04 PM

that was truly excellent! a wonderful poem!

SkywalkerRules 02-27-2010 05:24 AM

Aww, thank you! I'm still learning how to make good poetry. Think I'm getting there a little. Anyways, thanks. :D

Kyvios 02-27-2010 09:42 AM

that was really good Skywalker ^-^

SkywalkerRules 02-27-2010 02:48 PM

A thousand thanks, Kyvios! :^:

The_Catto 02-28-2010 08:24 AM

Filled with emotion and a bittersweet love.

A nice piece, Skywalker. A nice piece indeed!
The use of words work in such a way that you paint a portrait of a story in complete detail in only a few stanza's. A wondrous achievement!

It reminds me a little of Atton's tale to the Exile about when he was with the Sith, although this tale is more like-able in my opinion.

You say you are learning?
I say you are nearly there! Very close!
Keep at it, Skywalker and I am sure that you will be able to fluently construct poems that are wonderful as they are detailed.

Awesome work! :D

I'm not a great poet, but I like to think that I know talent when I see it, haha.

Looking forward to more!

machievelli 03-01-2010 10:09 PM

ask JM12 to review this...

SkywalkerRules 03-03-2010 09:29 PM

Yes sir. :)

And thanks very much, Mr_BFA! Yeah, I do love poetry. It connects with paintings and artistic things very much. :D

JediMaster12 03-16-2010 03:15 PM

read

-JM12


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