Thread: My GF poem!
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Old 03-16-2004, 11:41 AM   #3
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Originally posted by James Isaac
That's good . Apart from a few spelling and grammar errors, it's great
Thank you! I'm Danish thats why there are probably many grammar errors ! But thanks, its my first really long poem!

With bony hands I hold my partner, On soulless feet we cross the floor. The music stops,
as if to answer an empty knocking at the door. It seems his skin was sweet as mango when last I held him to my breast. But now, we dance this grim fandango and will four years before we rest!
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