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Old 07-23-2006, 03:08 PM   #166
Jae Onasi
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Cool. I like both chapters. I had a little bit of trouble with his nausea thing--I wasn't sure if that was a force bond thing sharing Revan's 'morning sickness' or if it was something he was experiencing as an angsty response to his new role and his approaching battle with the Blood king, or if it was just stomach flu/food poisoning.

And now you have to write another chapter and get that boy out of the water soon before he gets hypothermia.

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