Fixed Paranoidish. It flows much more smoothly now.
I agree. I personally think it's great the way it is. ^^ You have Raz and Sasha down perfectly, and I really love the dialogue. The ending is especially cute.
I actually got the name from an LJ community where the theme was Dreamtime. Yes, it is a little silly, but mostly in the way I used it. There were some very gorgeous pieces spun off from that.
Glad you enjoyed it, it's nice to have feedback from a fellow author-speaking of which I really should review other stories.