This is a great oneshot and it is nice to see you back. You wanted to know when your last post was and looking at your profile, it was this post
. Too bad about school preventing you being here. I don't know if you remember me, but my name used to be Pottsie, before it got changed.
Anyway back to the Fic. I know that in books, dialogue is set out like this, but I learned that on the Forums to do a space between dialogue and description, so forumites who have bad vision can read it easier.
Other than that, I think this Fic is great. I'm looking forward to the rewrite of Return of the Exile.