Well, I think that you might have rushed a little bit with this chapter too. My advice to you is to maybe slow down a little bit, and before submitting a new chapter, read through it to check for errors and add any detail that you want. That really helps me when I write anything.
Just some advice though....
Other than that, I think that you did a good job on this chapter. I do have a question though. Where exactly where Revan and Juhani fighting? Another Sand People Enclave? I don't know if I missed anything...Good chapter though, and keep on writing!