Thread: [Poetry] Burnseyy's Poetry
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Old 10-15-2008, 03:26 AM   #18
Sabretooth
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Keeping a poem routine is an idea I can agree with.

The Untitled Poem was the one I liked the best of all of your works, right now. It's sad and while to be truly honest, it did not break a lot of ground in sadness, reached a good depth of depression. Still, it was creative enough to suit its purposes, and so I liked it very much.

Part Time Angel however, I did not like as much. The language is better here, but the poem itself took some rereading and didn't have as much of an impact. So while it's a good effort, some extra cowbell could have helped the execution.


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