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Old 12-04-2008, 10:10 PM   #927
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Thanks for the review, Mach. When you say "the flow is a bit off," what do you mean, specifically? Is it that I almost 'disconnected' the story, and moved from one idea to another?

At any rate, thanks for reading.
That was a pretty good description.


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