Thread: [Fic] Shreds of a Dying Belief
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Old 12-09-2008, 09:42 PM   #57
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Very nooiiice, Bee.
Another great addition to the story and still with Lei and Revan, the feelings they share and the memories each relive whilst in the others presence is a nice touch and makes the reader (I, mainly, as I can't speak for the others ) feel a little bit more connected in knowing just what they are going through.

I'm liking this story more and more and like the others ... I can't wait for the next chapter.

Originally Posted by Bee Hoon
“Heads up.” She sounded eerily calm, despite the despite the distant roar of ships.
Is that another intent to impress the meaning of the sentence or a mistake. I'm confused,

Other than that though, didn't find anything else.

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