Thread: [Fic] Jedi Hunter (Chapter 1)
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Old 05-18-2012, 08:49 PM   #3
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I could definitely follow this story more closely than some of your others, but I do have a few questions and comments:

--Star Wars monetary units are called "credits" or "credit chips", not "galactic cents".
--Ghosts typically don't say they've "come back from the dead". That sounds more like a zombie or a vampire. Rather, they might say, "My spirit comes to take revenge upon you!"
--"Killing" a ghost means an exorcism, because a lightsaber would pass right through it.

Still, keep writing! I want to see where this story goes.
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