Poetry: Love's Death

[SkywalkerRules]

A long time ago, during the Sith-Imperial War,
I saw her. A wondrous, young woman.
Her golden hair swayed in the breeze as she danced,
and her eyes reflected the bright blue skies whenever
she smiled.

This young woman's heart was cheerful as a child;
an angelic voice of hers that echoed through my mind.
Yet, she seemed sadden for the Galaxy.
For me...

She saw me as a hero, not a bounty hunter or rogue.
Her comfort was like no other; a guardian spirit.
Her love was her strength, and nothing, not even a Sith,
could take that love away from her.

Now... she is gone from me. I grieve with anger, guilt, and
sadness. But thank the Force, she did not die in vain from a
lightsaber's pierce, a blaster wound, or anything horrible.
But that a deep sleep took her.

The Force be with you Lyna. My love, my friend.
Thank you for leading me to the road of redemption,
and not destruction.

[Te Darasuum Mandalor]

that was truly excellent! a wonderful poem!

[SkywalkerRules]

Aww, thank you! I'm still learning how to make good poetry. Think I'm getting there a little. Anyways, thanks.

[Kyvios]

that was really good Skywalker ^-^

[SkywalkerRules]

A thousand thanks, Kyvios!

[The_Catto]

Filled with emotion and a bittersweet love.

A nice piece, Skywalker. A nice piece indeed!
The use of words work in such a way that you paint a portrait of a story in complete detail in only a few stanza's. A wondrous achievement!

It reminds me a little of Atton's tale to the Exile about when he was with the Sith, although this tale is more like-able in my opinion.

You say you are learning?
I say you are nearly there! Very close!
Keep at it, Skywalker and I am sure that you will be able to fluently construct poems that are wonderful as they are detailed.

Awesome work!

I'm not a great poet, but I like to think that I know talent when I see it, haha.

Looking forward to more!

[machievelli]

ask JM12 to review this...

[SkywalkerRules]

Yes sir.

And thanks very much, Mr_BFA! Yeah, I do love poetry. It connects with paintings and artistic things very much.

[JediMaster12]

read

-JM12