Filled with emotion and a bittersweet love.
A nice piece, Skywalker. A nice piece indeed!
The use of words work in such a way that you paint a portrait of a story in complete detail in only a few stanza's. A wondrous achievement!
It reminds me a little of Atton's tale to the Exile about when he was with the Sith, although this tale is more like-able in my opinion.
You say you are learning?
I say you are nearly there! Very close!
Keep at it, Skywalker and I am sure that you will be able to fluently construct poems that are wonderful as they are detailed.
I'm not a great poet, but I like to think that I know talent when I see it, haha.
Looking forward to more!