I am typing this as I see certain parts of the film... I just watched the first fight scene where the dude with the beard and the sith guys fight. I though the weapons were cools (especialy the three blade thingy) but the people fighting didn't look much like they were fighting in a life or death situation. Instead it looked like they were doing a series of planed moves (which is what all movie fights are) that looked fake in the way the were performed. Ussualy when I am trying to beat the sh*t out of someone I don't have a blank expression on my face and I'm probably not going to lightly wave my saber around.
Another thing was in the scene were the two fighter go to the stream thing you can see the green sbarers blade bending. I don't know about you but I don't think a blade of pure enrgy is going to be bending while being held still...
OK I just watched the second fight and it was a little better but the gun could have used some work. I did like how when the big green laser blasts hit the asian/mexican (whatever) guy's saber how it went back a bit from the force of the hit (seemed more realistic) but when the sith was shooting that cannon of a gun (pistal thing) there should have been something more happening to the saber then a simple bounce off the blade. Anothier thing I noticed was the sith guy's pointless roles. It looked to me that he was wearing himself out more than anything in the way they were performed. Another thing was when the two were fighting it looked as though they were "placing" their sabers. By ths I mean that they seemed to lay one saber on the other instead of hiting it.
Ah the third drop... The begining was kind of funney when the sith slaped the jedi after he looses his saber. When the jedi hits the railing though.. that could have used some work as it looked a little too fake IMO. Also he he slams his head onto something like that he should have some sort of mark tos how for it.
I did however like the roof part except for when the jedi kicks the sith as it looks like the sith throws up... Also the death sequence looked a bit fake... Maybe a neck breaking head twist or something would have fit better... That was one of the better fight IMO from the other ones.
And the last fight... When the jedi turn around and notice the sith behind them, I think that the guy in the center (unhooded) could have used something to look less like a chapline(sp?). Again the saber fight could use a bit more power as they look a little too planned out and un natural.
Overall the film was pretty good considering it was a fan film. I know I was a bit critical on some things but Since you had a part in the film I feel you could could maybe use some of this to help with future fight choreography
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