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Old 11-11-2012, 02:21 PM   #1
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Star wars the gentle broken promise

Author: Revan-sama.

Game: Star wars Knight of the old republic.

Character: LSM/DSM Revan, Malak, Bastila Shan, Meetra Surik (exile), Master Atris, Master Arren Kae, Master Kreia, Mical.

Possible future Pairing: LSM Revan x Bastila, Meetra Surik x Mical.

Summary: A world, a galaxy, an universe unstable and shaking because of an eternal war. The Jedi against the Sith. The light side against the dark side.
Is there a possible way out of this cursed circle? Master Arren Kae saw too much of her Jedi friends becoming what they swore to fight until the very end. Was there no other alternative? Isn't there a way for everyone to express different arguments and live in peace? Is there no hope for the Republic? For democracy? Her answer came right after meeting the young promising Padawan of Master Kreia. Revan.
Please watch this other side of the story. The story of Revan.

Author's note: My grammar is bad, I know...(and english is not my first language so it doesn't help lol) Can someone help me with that?
I'm so sure I've made mistakes that I could cut my hand (french expression, hahaha)



We won.

We won the Mandalorian War, we have hunted them down until the end of the galaxy.

They have murdered many people only for their 'honor', to fight a strong opponent.

The republic.

We won the war and yet...

Even as I stabbed their leader, Mandalor, with my lightsaber, I knew...

As my tears were overflowing...

As I kept watching Master Arren Kae's cold body in a pool of blood.

I knew.

I've lost...

Not only myself...

But everything I believed in...

Chapter 0: A promise born of courage

Spring is a very beautiful season, especially on the planet Dantooine.

Flowers and various plants give life to the landscape, something that doesn't exist on Coruscant. On this world there was a serenity that you can't find everywhere. The perfect place for the training of a Jedi.

For young Padawan Revan, this place felt quite special. Here, he felt peace.

Today as usual has been quite a day. Studying, training with a saber and focus on the force.

Lift a small rock and push it with the force.

That was just a small part of training. From what the masters said, he was quite a quick learner.

His friend, Malak, got fired up and decided to train himself to catch up with Revan.

Even Master Kreia praised him! Usually she wouldn't give a praise so quickly.

Revan felt very proud of himself, he could almost achieve what most older apprentices could do.

Maybe soon he could have his first lightsaber...

"You did a good work today...But don't get too cocky."

"-? !"

He gasped and turned around to face the intruder.

How come he didn't heard or felt her presence?

Maybe it was normal, she was a Jedi master after all.

Master Arren Kae. She was one of his master.

She was wearing a white Jedi robe, had long silver hair and light blue eyes.

A very beautiful and friendly person...He couldn't understand why Master Kreia didn't like her.

Revan sighed and told her : "Please don't scare me like this, master."

The woman laughed quietly and said with a grin : " A jedi should be more alert of his surroundings."

He turned red at this and sulked.

Arren laughed even more. She waved her hand in front of her and said : "Sorry Revan...I'm only teasing."

Then she looked at the place where they were : "Beside that, this place is very beautiful."

Indeed it was. it was a field of white flowers, not too far away from the Jedi enclave.

After inspecting the place a bit more, she stared at her student and noticed that he seemed very calm.

Revan had a kind heart with an inner fire. But here that fire was stable.

The older woman smiled gently and asked him : "Do you like the enclave on Dantooine better than the Jedi temple?"

His surprise at the question soon turned to confusion.

"It's not that I don't like the Jedi temple on Coruscant...it's just that..." He smiled and told her :

"There is something special about this place, not because it's beautiful, There is a peaceful ..."

"...atmosphere?" asked Arren Kae.

Revan nodded eagerly.

She smiled and explained : "It's because the force has a strong connection with this place...if only..."

Her eyes became distant and wasn't smiling anymore. It surprised Revan since he never really got to see such attitude from Master Arren.

She could felt the impatience of her student for her to continue her sentence.

"If only there were more places like this in the galaxy."

"There aren't many of them?" asked a curious Revan. This time, her face was sad.

She was still looking at the landscape filled with flowers but she kept talking :

"There are, however, many of them were devastate because of war or because of fights against the Sith."
Master Arren's hair were dancing in the wind and Revan couldn't see her expression because of her hair in front of her face.

She kept silence for a moment, as if she was reflecting if it was alright to say what she was going to say:

"Is it really alright this way?"

"What do you mean Master?" It was as if she just realized Revan was there too.

She looked at him with an expression nonchalant then turned her gaze toward the horizon.

"It's not only the war against the Sith...Many Jedi, some of the most talented and most trustful member of our order leave to join the Sith and fall to the dark side. For all sort of reasons..."

She sighed deeply as she remember many of her Jedi friends, people she knew since childhood, turned to the dark side. Telling her either to join them or that she couldn't understand.

"For power, for not believing in republic anymore, for losing someone important and being filled with grieve, believing the Jedi Order can't bring true justice...And many, many other reasons."

She gritted her teeth as she remember some of her friends' words :

The Jedi order and the Republic are weak, they will bring us to our doom!

The Jedi try only to retain our true potential!

She died! She DIED! ! ! I can only avenge her by killing that fiend and I can't!

If the Jedi can't bring justice to the innocent who died then I will by my own way!

Wasn't there...Anything we could do for them?

Wasn't there a way to understand? To compromise?

Without falling so lowly as them?

We are Jedi, protector, guardians of peace. We fight for peace and Justice.

How can we still call ourselves this if we can't even protect the mind of those we are supposed to protect?

"Master Arren?"

Arren Kae opened slowly her eyes and turned her face to Revan. She forced a smile and said:

"Sorry, I'm probably confusing you with all this."

Then she crouch down toward him : "But do you know why I'm telling you this?"

Revan shook his head to say no.

Then Arren put a hand on his head, stroking gently his long black hair.

And smiled kindly : "Because I believe that someday you will understand and bring peace to this galaxy."

His light brown eyes widen.

"You have a kind heart and a strong will that most adults doesn't have. Keep these things close to your mind and you will get strong enough to protect the Jedi order the republic and most of all..."

She got up.

"All lives in this galaxy."

She began to leave, leaving Revan in his thoughts.

He kept silence the whole event.


-Next day-

"...And then, after training myself hard, I could push the small rock like you did yesterday!"

Malak was explaining so many things that Revan kept forgetting about it.

He had other things in his mind.

"Revan? Revan! You're not even listening!" sulked Malak.

"Uh? Oh sorry Malak, I have something to do." He began to leave.

"What? What do you have to do? Training only start in one hour."

"I'll tell you about it later!"

-Outside the enclave Jedi-

She should be here somewhere meditating...Ah! There she is!

"Master Arren!" Revan ran toward the silver haired master. She was meditating next a fountain.

And she was alone too.

She didn't open her eyes and said with an amused tone : "Calm down Revan, take a deep breath."

He took a deep breath....Lots of deep breath before talking :

"I...(panting) I was looking for you."

"Oh? Is that so? Does Master Kreia has something else to reproach me?" she said bitterly Kreia's name.

Master Arren Kae and Master Kreia weren't in good terms...even though Revan didn't know exactly why.

"No, she doesn't know I'm here."

Arren opened her eyes and looked at Revan : "Then what is it about?"

"About yesterday's conversation."

She seemed a bit worried. As if she thought that maybe it was a bad idea to talk about it.

Revan took a deep breath and had a determinate look on his face.

"I don't know what I can do about it...But even so."

Because I believe that someday you will understand and bring peace to this galaxy.

"I'll try. I'll do my best to change the course of this cursed circle. And someday I'll show Master Arren a world without the Sith. A World at peace where we can understand each other. Where people doesn't need to join the dark side."

Arren's eyes widen at his words and was surprised of his maturity.


"I'll make a better Jedi order and bring Justice to this Galaxy!"

Just maybe...

What I've lost wasn't lost after all.

"I promise!"

She kept silence and gazed into his brown eyes full of determination.

"I see...Then..."

She smiled and began to leave toward the Jedi enclave.

"I'll look forward it."

A modest answer of a master Jedi.

A holly vow from a future champion of Light.

A promise born of courage...

...And died of despair.


Argh...It's very hard to write about a character we don't know much about.
I hope it wasn't too boring...

Revan sama has requested a fanfic review for this thread.

The more the difficulty, the more the glory.

Last edited by Revan sama; 11-16-2012 at 11:47 AM.
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