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10-21-2005, 05:13 PM
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Originally Posted by Paranoidish
Wait...I like Sparkly.
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While amusing I think it would detract from the insane..wait no that would be insane. However Sparkly versus Scalper.
I'm actually at a tie now. I'll insert them into the blanks and see how that works out. |
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10-21-2005, 05:16 PM
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I did insert them into the blanks and came out with this:
Ashlyn meaning vision
How about that?
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10-21-2005, 05:17 PM
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I like it. Vision is sort of like psychih. I dont know, like Psychic vision. Sounds good to me.
^Above picture=awesome.
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10-21-2005, 05:17 PM
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Darn. Nobody would've expected a Sparkly Home for the Insane.
Instead of therapy, the patients get pastries.
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10-21-2005, 05:20 PM
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Originally Posted by TyraaRane
Well, I can't think of any asylum names, but I think it's an awesome start. I particularly love that last line, for some reason.
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I need to ass kiss Paranoidish right now. It is pretty good turned out a lot better for a rough draft then I thought it would. A nice start for me espically as I have a problem with setting up the scene.
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10-21-2005, 05:22 PM
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Originally Posted by Purple Squid
Darn. Nobody would've expected a Sparkly Home for the Insane.
Instead of therapy, the patients get pastries.
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Now that would be an asylum that actually cured you. |
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10-21-2005, 06:18 PM
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Then they'd have to go to Jenny Creig
"The kraken stirs.
Ten thousand sushi dinner cry for vengeance."
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10-21-2005, 06:22 PM
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Oh! Shinzuku, I got the next chapter. Of course, I'm still fiddling around with the first chapter but that's not the point...
This one is funny. I laughed like woah. Expect to see an overly complexified version soon.
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10-21-2005, 06:25 PM
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Okay
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Ten thousand sushi dinner cry for vengeance."
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10-21-2005, 06:34 PM
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Hey got any idea what should happen in the next chapter. All I have is
" I love you"
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Ten thousand sushi dinner cry for vengeance."
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10-21-2005, 06:36 PM
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Originally Posted by shinzuku
Hey got any idea what should happen in the next chapter. All I have is
" I love you"
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Hm. Is chapter 3 the end of the whole story? If so, why don't we end it not with 'I love you', but with the whole untold emotions thing?
Pimp, eh? And I can be pretty poetic when called for.
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10-21-2005, 06:39 PM
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It's not the end. It's like, "I love you, but you're evil." Some denial,Then some angst. then some other stuff.
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10-21-2005, 06:41 PM
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Originally Posted by shinzuku
It's not the end. It's like, "I love you, but you're evil." Some denial,Then some angst. then some other stuff.
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Oooh. Denial AND angst? Going for the whole package, neh? Well, hopefully we can turn it into humorous angst, or really smart angst.
Maybe the next chapter can be about a sudden breakout in huge fires about the city?
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10-21-2005, 06:43 PM
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Okay fires. Hmmm. Fires.... Boyd
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10-21-2005, 06:44 PM
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Originally Posted by shinzuku
Okay fires. Hmmm. Fires.... Boyd
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No, no. Perhaps Sasha lights little fires around old buildings, so as to have them spread and turn into big fires! And all because he wants them to learn.
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10-21-2005, 06:45 PM
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Originally Posted by Purple Squid
No, no. Perhaps Sasha lights little fires around old buildings, so as to have them spread and turn into big fires! And all because he wants them to learn.
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Oh okay. And they fight.
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10-21-2005, 06:57 PM
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Originally Posted by shinzuku
Oh okay. And they fight.
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Yes. Much ass-kickery.
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10-21-2005, 07:00 PM
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question: how do you write angst? is it like she's depressed to learn she loves an evil person?
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10-21-2005, 07:04 PM
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Originally Posted by shinzuku
question: how do you write angst? is it like she's depressed to learn she loves an evil person?
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Hmm. I'm not sure angst would fit Milla. Well, straight up angst. Perhaps denial would work a tad better. I'll PM a good example of denial in a second... and angst, if you still want to do that. See what fits better.
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10-21-2005, 07:17 PM
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Would Sasha hitting on her kind of kill it?
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10-21-2005, 07:20 PM
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Originally Posted by shinzuku
Would Sasha hitting on her kind of kill it?
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I guess so.
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10-21-2005, 07:20 PM
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DAMN
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10-21-2005, 07:22 PM
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Originally Posted by shinzuku
DAMN
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Oooh. Doesn't sound good.
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10-21-2005, 08:25 PM
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OMG Purple, your new icon is <3.
"A few times in my life I've had moments of absolute clarity. When for a few brief seconds, the silence drowns out the noise and I can feel rather than think, and things seem so sharp and the world seems so fresh. I can never make these moments last. I cling to them, but like everything, they fade. I've lived my life on these moments. They pull me back to the present and I realize that everything is exactly the way it was meant to be."
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10-21-2005, 08:26 PM
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Originally Posted by Darth_Ave2011
OMG Purple, your new icon is <3.
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Why, thank you. Your avatar is woof.
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10-21-2005, 08:36 PM
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No, it's actually bark, not woof.
"A few times in my life I've had moments of absolute clarity. When for a few brief seconds, the silence drowns out the noise and I can feel rather than think, and things seem so sharp and the world seems so fresh. I can never make these moments last. I cling to them, but like everything, they fade. I've lived my life on these moments. They pull me back to the present and I realize that everything is exactly the way it was meant to be."
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10-21-2005, 08:47 PM
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Originally Posted by Darth_Ave2011
No, it's actually bark, not woof.
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Oh. Sorry. Very bark.
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10-22-2005, 11:28 AM
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This Loboto and Oleander conversation is turning out very interesting...
That doesn't mean good just interesting.
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10-22-2005, 11:29 AM
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Really? You mean you've actually been working on it and not just saying you've been working on it?
I'm so proud.
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10-22-2005, 11:36 AM
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me too, I'm glad you're in the family.
"A few times in my life I've had moments of absolute clarity. When for a few brief seconds, the silence drowns out the noise and I can feel rather than think, and things seem so sharp and the world seems so fresh. I can never make these moments last. I cling to them, but like everything, they fade. I've lived my life on these moments. They pull me back to the present and I realize that everything is exactly the way it was meant to be."
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10-22-2005, 02:52 PM
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Originally Posted by Purple Squid
Really? You mean you've actually been working on it and not just saying you've been working on it?
I'm so proud.
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Thank you. I know it's amazing for me. I've been doing it all this time. Erasing and writing writing and erasing. Then going back and editing. I'm freakin driving myself insane.
Then I'm going to have to run it by with Paranoidish.
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10-22-2005, 03:46 PM
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Sigh I want to write fanfiction, but I can't until I've beaten the game.
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10-22-2005, 06:09 PM
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I will be posting here soon as I get the full idea in my head...
 
You have the insanity of a MANATEE!!!!!!11
I gotta car and now I'm on da road. Watch out highway, here I come!!!!
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10-23-2005, 12:55 AM
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I came up with a fanfic while I was doing my roleplay. The problem is that I can't come up with a title...
Raz: Is this where I get another speech and learn a lesson?
Sasha: No. Here's your merit badge. Let us never speak of this again.
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10-23-2005, 12:57 AM
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Originally Posted by Agent-Sarah
I came up with a fanfic while I was doing my roleplay. The problem is that I can't come up with a title...
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Alright, can I help in any way?
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10-23-2005, 01:32 AM
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Originally Posted by Purple Squid
Alright, can I help in any way?
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I guess so...
Okay, here's the plot of the story so far...
This takes five years before the game. Sasha and Milla are trying to find a robed psychic figure who goes by the name, "The Outlaw." But there's another agent is also chasing this guy down. Together, they will find clues to the outlaw's plans and stop him from terrorizing.
In my roleplay, "Trouble at Whisper Rock", Sarah (my character) mentions a bit of information about it.
"Yeah." Sarah replied. "It was a while ago, like in late '99 or 2000. Bigface asked me to help them while they're were searching for a psychic outlaw. When we found him in the parking lot in an underground club, we started fighting. I used my gun and got a little too 'trigger happy' as my boss uses the term. I accidentally hit the gas tank of a car and the **** hit the fan. I blew up eight cars...one of them was Sasha and Milla's. As a form of forgiveness, I bought them a new car...the same one that you saw from the camp's parking lot."
Raz: Is this where I get another speech and learn a lesson?
Sasha: No. Here's your merit badge. Let us never speak of this again.
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10-23-2005, 01:34 AM
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Hm. Have you come up with any names so far?
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10-23-2005, 02:05 AM
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Originally Posted by Purple Squid
Hm. Have you come up with any names so far?
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The only names I came up with are "Of Agents and Outlaws", "The Outlaw", and "The Robed Outlaw".
Raz: Is this where I get another speech and learn a lesson?
Sasha: No. Here's your merit badge. Let us never speak of this again.
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10-23-2005, 02:06 AM
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Originally Posted by Agent-Sarah
The only names I came up with are "Of Agents and Outlaws", "The Outlaw", and "The Robed Outlaw".
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I was going to suggest 'The Outlaw', actually. I think it's relevant to the plot and pretty cool sounding.
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10-23-2005, 02:11 AM
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Originally Posted by Purple Squid
I was going to suggest 'The Outlaw', actually. I think it's relevant to the plot and pretty cool sounding.
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It does sound cool. And what do you think of that little snipet from my roleplay?
Raz: Is this where I get another speech and learn a lesson?
Sasha: No. Here's your merit badge. Let us never speak of this again.
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