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Old 02-20-2006, 09:38 PM   #1
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(FAN FICTION) Revan's Bloodline

Prelude:
Two thousand years ago, folk legends originated about an all powerful Sith Lord named Darth Revan, and the terrifying power he wielded. Most Jedi dismiss this legend as standard dogmatic propaganda from which all truth had decayed. Let this be known that, I Gadden Nomi, the keeper of the archives at the Jedi Temple on Coruscant have discovered something horrifying in the archives, a holocron of the notorious Sith Lord with a pregnant woman named Bastilla. Let it be known that not only did Darth Revan exist, every bit as powerful as the legends say, but he may have descendants that are living in our time…..
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Old 02-20-2006, 09:57 PM   #2
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Chapter 1:
Gadden Nomi rushed through the Jedi Temple Halls, rudely shoving his fellow Jedi from his path. Meanwhile the High Jedi Council resided inside the council chamber, awaiting to learn why their beloved archive keeper had called for this emergency meeting. The doors bursted open, startling some of the council members.
“Why have you called this meeting, Gadden?” asked Grand Master Arme.
Saying nothing, Gadden reached inside his cloak and pulled out an old holocron, he fiddled with its ancient and complex controls for a few moments until he finally got it to work in front of a curious yet frustrated council. Within moments two figures appeared over the holocron, a young man and a beautiful pregnant woman whom the man addressed as “Bastilla”, shock and horror filled the room when Bastilla addressed the man as “Revan”. The holocron ended and an awkward silence hung over the council.
“How do we even have proof that his bloodline didn’t end?” proposed Jedi Master Hame.
“This is true, if there was a descendant of Revan alive today, we would have sensed it” said Master Otno, supporting Master Hame’s suggestion.
“Whether what Master Hame says is true or not, this is an urgent matter that we must investigate” commanded Grand Master Arme “Gadden, you search the archives for more clues, we will need to gather multiple scout parties, composed of republic soldiers and Jedi, led by someone in this room”
“I will lead the parties” said Jedi Master Dajron, a man of normal stature with long black hair, medium skin tone, and brown eyes.
“All in favor say aye” Arme sternly commanded”
A unanimous vote gave Dajron the mission.
(one week later….)
Dajron sat inside the nameless Republic cruiser thinking about the dire importance of his mission. Through the past week he read about Darth Revan, his assignment was to trace the course of Revan’s family history through the past two thousand years. Six other Jedi followed by a squad of republic troopers boarded the ship.
“Master, how do you intend on finding Revan’s descendant?” asked one of the young Jedi Knights.
“There are five other squads of Republic troops, one will assume command of this squad, and five others will assume command of the others boarded on five other cruisers in this hangar. I have read all of the limited information that we have about Darth Revan, after coming back to the light, he lived the rest of his life in peace after destroying the Star Forge. The records say his death and funeral both took place in Theed, Naboo. Which is where we will begin our search, I can only pray that Gadden will find more information on the archives.” responded Dajron. The six Jedi bowed and all but one of them left to board the other cruisers.
After many long, silent hours Dajron landed upon the grand city of Theed and greeted by the Queen of Naboo herself. The Jedi Master asked to see the head librarian of Naboo immediately. The Queen granted permission, Dajron bowed and began to walk to the library, gesturing for the six Jedi to follow. One of the Jedi walked up beside Dajron and asked:
“Master Dajron, isn’t it against the Jedi Code to bring troops on a peaceful planet?”
“It is, but if there is a descendant of Revan alive today, the Sith most likely are looking for him too, these troops are here to combat the Sith troops if they cross our path.” Dajron responded.
The Seven Jedi halted, Dajron looked and saw that they were at their destination. He signaled for the six Jedi to remain outside the library as he conducted business with the head librarian.

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Old 02-20-2006, 10:00 PM   #3
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comments and constructive criticism welcome. it will pick up. once again sry for the double post.
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Old 02-20-2006, 11:11 PM   #4
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Chapter 2:

Dajron was cordially greeted by the head librarian named Arthana, then he was ushered into the head librarians chamber.
“Sit down, Master Jedi,” Arthana requested.
“Thank you, but I am afraid I am here solely on business” Dajron said while taking his seat.
“What is it you wish to know Master Jedi?” Arthana asked in a friendly tone.
“What do you know about Darth Revan and his offspring?”
A more solemn tone filled the room, Arthana’s eyes widened.
“Ah, you seek information on Revan, by coming here I take it you know he died here, in this very city?”
“Yes, what became of his child?”
“His son’s name was Xyvion Revan, Revan trained him in the arts of the force all by himself, without the council’s knowledge, Xyvion was a powerful Jedi. He was last seen on this planet when he departed for Alderaan. There were some reports from citizens on Alderaan of seeing him with a woman but it was nothing official.”
“This is all you know?” Dajron asked.
“Unfortunately, yes. People with extensive knowledge of Revan are hard to find, you must search selectively”
“I see, thank you” Dajron said politely.
They both stood, they bowed and Dajron exited the room. Once out of the library, the six Jedi followed him back to the ship. Dajron was flustered because he traveled such a far distance for such a small amount of information. Once they reached the starport Dajron was greeted by the colonel of the republic troops who were left in the hangar to stand guard.
“Sir, in your absence we received an urgent message from head archivist Gadden, he said it relates to Revan” reported the colonel. A rush of excitement burst into the somewhat demoralized Dajron. He ran into the ship and contacted the awaiting archivist.
“Gadden, it is Master Dajron, what did you wish to report?” asked Dajron.
“Master, during my thorough investigations I’ve seemed to have come across a second holocron that will aid you in your effort” responded Gadden.
“Tell me”
“This holocron is precisely eight hundred years old, so it saves you one thousand two hundred years of information to look for” Gadden boasted “Okay so since, Revan, all of his descendants were all powerful force users, most were jedi up until his family was found to having lovers, apparently a secret continuation of Revan’s line had been going on without our knowledge Until eight hundred years ago, when we discovered about their secrets and expelled them from the order. Supposedly the descendant expelled was a woman named Marina Revan, after her expulsion she and her lover spent the rest of their lives on Correlia”
“This is very helpful, I deeply thank you.”
Dajron switched off his communicator, he was ecstatic about Gadden’s discovery. He found it simply astounding that Revan’s family was so powerful that they made their dealings and very existence undetectable by the Jedi. Dajron walked out of his ship back into the starport where his Jedi and troopers stood conversing with one another, awaiting his orders.
“Teams 3 and 5 will accompany mine to Correlia. Teams 2, 4 and 6 will remain here and look for more information on Revan’s family history.” Dajron commanded “ To the teams remaining here, always have someone standing by on the communicator to receive further orders”


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Old 02-21-2006, 01:34 AM   #5
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Two first great Chapters. I've never had a thought that Revan would have a kid. Looking foward to seeing more.

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Old 02-21-2006, 02:32 AM   #6
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Looks good so far. I had the same idea in mind but slightly different. Welcome to the forums.

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Old 02-21-2006, 07:29 AM   #7
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thanks guys. ill have more up later today so stay tuned.


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Old 02-21-2006, 08:54 AM   #8
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Good stuff so far Sciex. Welcome to the forums Though you may want to consider an extra paragraph or two. Makes it a bit easier on the eyes for reading.


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Old 02-21-2006, 10:37 AM   #9
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here 'tis.

Chapter 3:
Dajron was overwhelmed by the fact that he was closer than anybody to solving the mystery behind Revan’s elusive family history. He sat next to his fellow Jedi Knight on the spacious cruiser that was en route to Correlia.
“It is quite possible that this planet will be where our target is” Dajron commented “Which means the Sith are either one short step ahead or one short step behind, either way we have to hurry”
The young Jedi said nothing; he was contemplating what his first encounter with a real Sith Lord would be like. The ship shot out of hyperspace, they were at their destination. The young Jedi stood up:
“When we land I want this team split in two, half will go with Master Dajron and half will go with me, we will scan the city of coronet for clues, the person we are searching for could very well be on this planet” The Jedi Kinght commanded.
Dajron was amazed by the young Jedi’s leadership, he leaned over and asked:
“What is your name?”
Flattered, the young Jedi responded “My name is Keron Ali-Tibben” answered the Jedi.
The ship halted, Dajron and Keron pulled the the hoods to their cloaks over their heads. When they exited the spacecraft they found that their other two teams were already waiting for them in the hangar. The second Dajron stepped into the hangar he felt a massive power on this planet. Once he felt this almost divine power he knew that the person he was seeking was on this planet. He proceeded to give orders:
“Jedi, do you feel that? It’s unlike anything I have felt before, it seems Revan’s descendant is standing on the same planet that we stand upon, Keron, you contact Grand Master Arme and report that we are on Correlia, the planet where Revan’s descendant resides. All teams are now under my command. We will stick together until we find this person” Dajron commanded.
Soon he felt another power appear on the planet, it was less powerful but more mature, the darkness behind this second power sent a shiver down his spine. As predicted the Sith were in persuit of Revan’s descendant. When Keron emerged from the ship the look on his face told Dajron that he was aware of a Sith Lord’s presence. The squads followed Dajron out of the hangar and then halted when he did.
“On second thought, everybody but Keron stay here. We needn’t draw attention to ourselves. Keron and I shall go alone” Dajron stated.
Keron and Dajron exited the hangar silently side by side.
“How will we learn of his whereabouts?” Keron curiously asked.
“This power is large enough to track down ourselves, we simply follow it.” Dajron responded. After hours of searching; their sleuthing brought them to a slum just outside Coronet.
“This is a rather odd place for a powerful force user to live” Keron commented,
“Shhh.” Dajron commanded “I sense that the Sith Lord is close too. We need to move with haste”
The two Jedi silently sprinted until they came upon a back alley. The enormous force power they sensed was radiating from that dark alley.
“Keron, stay here and stand guard, I am going in alone. If the person is hostile we should try not to upset it” Dajron commanded.
Entering the back alley gave Dajron an adrenaline rush like he never felt before. It was so dark that he couldn’t see the hand that he held out in front of him. The next thing he knew he was suspended in mid air.
“Who are you” echoed a youthful voice from deeper in the back alley.
“My name is Jedi Master Lio Dajron, I mean you no harm, and who are you?” Dajron responded.
“My name is Ayro Revan” echoed the voice.
A smirk appeared on Dajron face, he had finally found the descendant of a man powerful enough to destroy an entire army, a man intelligent enough to defeat the Mandalorians. He was in the presence of the Great Revan’s posterity. Dajron heard the hiss of lightsabers coming from behind him, the Sith Lord had arrived.
“Listen Ayro, please let me go, a terrible person is coming, I need to defend you” Dajron requested.
To his surprise, Ayro granted his request and he dropped to the ground. Dajron sprinted out from the back alley. When light returned to his eyes he saw Keron impaled on a red lightsaber. Then he dropped to the ground, dead. Wielding the red lightsaber was a figure cloaked in black, with piercing yellow eyes glowing from his haggard face.
Dajron activated his lightsaber and assumed his battle stance.
“Before you die, my name is Darth Vailosis” boasted the Sith Lord.
“Arrogance is a sign of weakness” Dajron swiftly retorted.
The two warriors began to duel. Dajron used The Force to push Darth Vailosis backwards, Vailosis gracefully landed on his feet; he cut at Dajron’s feet. Vailosis’ attack failed when Dajron lept in the air.
“I’ve won this match, Jedi!” Vailosis proclaimed. Vailosis shot Force Lighting at the airborne Jedi. Without panicking, Dajron held his lightsaber out in front of him absorbing the lightning.
“The boy’s destiny is with the Sith, as was his ancestor, The Great Darth Revan.” Vailosis argued.
“No, Revan saw the error of his ways and his wife and all of his descendants were Jedi” Dajron responded.
“Don’t be so sure” Vailosis said. Before he had a chance to explain himself Force Lightning shot out from the back alley. A young boy wearing tattered, dirty and worn garments; he looked unusual with his crimson red hair and black rectangular markings on his chin and both cheeks. Dajron felt a sense of awe and humiliation when he discovered a small boy was powerful enough to suspend him in mid air and bring a Sith Lord to his knees with such an advanced Force technique.
“Boy, don’t resist the inevitable, you will be Darth Revan II.” Vailosis said.
“Apparently he has no desire to join you, Darth.” Dajron said.
“Your kind killed my parents.” Ayro said angrily.
Dajron felt Ayro’s power rising, though he was powerful, he had little control over his gifts.He felt controlling Ayro’s rising anger would be a problem, he hoped he would overcome it.
“That’s it, release your anger” Vailosis said seductively. He walked over to Ayro and prepared to lift him up. Dajron held his lightsaber parallel to Ayro, in front of the Sith Lords path,
“Don’t try it” Dajron said sternly.
Vailosis ignored Dajron’s warning and with a quick flick of Dajron’s lightsasber, off came Vailosis’ hands. Vailosis shrieked in pain,
“This isn’t over, Jedi scum!” Vailosis threatened. Vailosis levitated his cloak, he dropped his cloak over his body and the cloak collapsed, he had vanished into thin air. Dajron deactivated his lightsaber and muffled Ayro’s hair.
“When did you learn to do that?” Dajron asked.
“I learned myself. These powers just popped up.” Ayro responded.
Dajrons eyes widened in amazement “How long have you been an orphan?”
“3 years, Sith appeared in my house one day and killed my parents, they tried to take me but I ran away.”
“Ah, well would you like to come with me to Coruscant and become a Jedi?” Dajron asked.
“Like my daddy wanted? Yes, I do.” Ayro happily responded.
Dajron held out his hand, Ayro grasped it and they walked back to the starport in Coronet.


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Revan II. It has a nice ring to it. He didn't make the same mistake as his Father luckily. I look forward to reading more.
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Old 02-21-2006, 01:38 PM   #11
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hey ill prolly have chap 4 up by tonight but dont hold me to it.


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Old 02-21-2006, 03:35 PM   #12
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Revan's Bloodline is a good concept however your story feels very rushed. Another thing is that the Jedi are known to "love their secrets" and by having so many Jedi on the search for Revan's decendants it really feels out of place.
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Revan's Bloodline is a good concept however your story feels very rushed. Another thing is that the Jedi are known to "love their secrets" and by having so many Jedi on the search for Revan's decendants it really feels out of place.

yea i was worried about it being rushed but its better than just wording around and not going anywhere with it, i mean if he had to go to another planet i was afraid that the reader might lose interest. as for it being out of place, they also weren't sure of his whereabouts, so they wanted to cover more ground in the form of search parties, cliche but it works. and to the people it IS a secret nobody held up a sign saying "HEY WE ARE SEARCHING FOR DARTH REVAN"S DESCENDANT!" so it is a secret. but thanks for your two cents, i appreciate it.


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Old 02-21-2006, 04:28 PM   #14
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another thing i was thinking about with the search parties and all is that the Jedi are also known to break the code and their traditions during times of emergency, and when there is a powerful force user that could be a Sith, id say that falls under the category of emergency.


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i like pretty cool!!! it's pretty cool how you describe revan descendants. i also like the fact that you explain them so clearly. if i were one to judge a story your rating would 100%. can't wait to read your next chapter


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ahh here we go again

Chapter 4:

Back at the starport the floor was littered with dead bodies.
“It seems Vailosis’ platoon found mine” Dajron observed. Ayro stood silent looking around at the corpses. Dajron proceeded to speak:
“I am-”
“That Jedi isn’t dead” Ayro interrupted.
“How do you know?” Dajron asked
“That Jedi’s heart is still beating, I can hear it”
Dajron walked over and felt the Jedi’s pulse, as Ayro stated, he was alive. Dajron struggled to lift the Jedi off of the ground and placed him in the medical bay of the republic cruiser. Then he quickly ushered Ayro into the ship. Before lift off, Dajron contacted Grand Jedi Master Arme:
“Master Arme, I have Revan’s descendant, I am on my way back to Coruscant.” Dajron reported.
“How powerful is the child?” asked Arme.
“Like nothing I’ve ever seen, he is a small boy yet he managed to bring a strong, fully trained Sith Lord to his knees”
“Hmmm…Bring him back here, he’s going to appear before before the council. While we are on this matter what Sith Lord did you encounter?”
“One I have never seen before, his name is Darth Vailosis.”
“Bring the boy back to the temple, he will be safe from the Sith here, we will discuss what is to become of him”
“Yes, Master”
Dajron turned off the communicator and set a course for Courscant. The vessel lifted from the hangar and vanished into hyperspace. During the hours in transit, Ayro turned out to be quiet but friendly boy. When they landed on Coruscant, Dajron was welcomed as a hero. The wounded Jedi was in stable condition upon their arrival and was rushed to the medical clinic in the temple. Dajron and Ayro were escorted to the council chamber. The Jedi council was unsure about how to deal with this situation; everyone in Revan’s line had been exposed as defiant and arrogant. Dajron and Ayro entered the council’s chamber. They walked into the middle of the circular room, surrounded by the great Jedi Masters.
“Masters, this is Ayro Revan, the direct descendant of Revan whom I was dispatched to seek. “Dajron announced. The council looked at his unusual appearance. His dirty, blood-stained clothes, untamed crimson hair, and peculiar markings made him stand out from all the other people in the room. Finally silence broke after many uneasy moments.
“Where did you find him?” asked Grand Master Arme.
“In a slum on the outskirts on Coronet, Correlia, his abilities amazed me” responded Dajron as Ayro stood in front of him, silent and nearly trembling in the presence of the High Jedi Council.
“What did you witness?”
“When I first met him he lifted me in the air using the force, and he managed to hold me there. I couldn’t move” said Dajron with a subtle one of embarrassment. “Then this new Sith, Darth Vailosis was struck by his Force Lightning, which turned the battle in my favor. He has the ability to harness both Light and Dark side powers regardless of his allegiance. Then upon our return to the starport, all of our troops had met demise. The Sith brought troops with them as we predicted. He heard one of the wounded Jedi’s hearbeat, if it weren’t for him one of our comrades would have died”
“Hmmm.” Arme grunted “He is still young enough to be trained, but there still are a few things we must discuss. Please exit, we will summon you when we’ve reached a verdict.”
Arme used the Force to slide the door open and gestured for the two to exit. The wait seemed like an eternity but boredom broke when Dajron caught word that the three search parties landed safely on Coruscant and the leading Jedi had important information for him. Dajron asked the messenger to look after Ayro as he received this crucial piece of information. The Jedi he was looking for sat inside the library of the temple telling Gadden of his find.
“Ah, Dajron, you are here, good” said the Jedi.
“You called for me?” Dajron asked.
“Yes, after hours of diligent searching the library on Naboo, I came across a datapad written by Xyvion Revan. According to him he wasn’t an only child.”
“He had a sibling, isn’t that irrelevant?”
“Ah, that is what I thought too, until I searched deeper for works about his brother, Ugauco Revan. The reason why Xyvion left Naboo was to take their sibling conflicts away from Naboo to let the elderly Revan live the remainder of this life in peace.”
“Describe this conflict”
“Master, Xyvion’s brother, Ugauco was a Sith Lord. Revan’s line became divided by Xyvion and Ugauco, Xyvion’s line followed the ways of the Jedi, for the most part and Ugauco’s line has the teachings of the Sith passed down through it.”
“Is that it?” asked Dajron.
“Almost, Xyvion also wrote about a distant descendant who would resolve this conflict and reunite the Revan family. From how Ayro has been described to me, I have reason to believe Ayro is the boy in the prophecy.” responded the Jedi.
“Has Gadden told the council of this development?” Dajron asked.
“He is currently on his way to do so.” responded the Jedi.
The messenger entered the library with Ayro at his side.
“Master Dajron, the council has reached a verdict, they will see you now” said the messenger.


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that's it. what would happen with aryo. and what will the counsil verdict be? will aryo be train in the the ways of the jedi? or somewhere in the trainning will he fall to the teaching's of the sith??? you left me clueless but hey, so good so far. love the story 2 thumbs upp


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the point was to leave u on a cliffhanger, thats what keeps u coming back.


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Sounds good so far. I would suggest spacing between paragraphs, makes it easier on me eyes. Still it sounds good. Keep posting

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I know someone said this already but you do need to really slow it down a bit. It would make your story much better. I think it is pretty good so far but if you slowed it down that would make it alot better.

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Chapter 5:
Dajron and Ayro walked side by side through the halls of the Jedi temple, they were seconds away from learning the judgment that the council would pass on Ayro Revan. The doors to the council chambers slid open, the Jedi Masters all had poker faces.
Ayro looked up at Dajron and then around the room, his heart beat was on a steady incline.

“As you know we have come to a decision” stated Arme.
“Yes, what will become of Ayro?” asked Dajron.
“As you know Ayro’s family has been known to be defiant due to their natural power in the Force. But, not admitting him as a Jedi would be making a powerful Sith, for if we do not accept him, the Sith certainly will. With Gadden’s piece of information that was just delivered; we believe the only wise decision would be to have him trained”

Ayro’s face brightened with a rarely seen smile, Dajron sighed in relief. Ayro had finally begun to realize his dream.

“Since Ayro will not be an ordinary Jedi, he cannot receive ordinary training. He shall not be instated as a youngling as this would merely hold him back, rather, he will be assigned a master immediately. The boy seems to be fond of you, Dajron. Are you up to the challenge?”

The Jedi Master looked Arme straight in the eye and nodded.

“Very good, now get this boy in his proper robes; this is no way for a young apprentice to look.” Arme declared.

Ayro and Dajron bowed, they exited the room.

“Come, Ayro we must get you in your apprentice robes, and while we are it, get you a bath.” Dajron chuckled.

Ayro smiled and said “I guess from now on I’m going to call you Master?”
“Indeed, your training begins tomorrow, don’t expect it to be easy” Dajron responded.

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there it is, sry, its short.




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I see. You were giving a sort of prequel type story before the main plot. Can't wait to see more.

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Chapter 6: (13 Years Later…….)

Ayro stood alone in a bright yet limitless void. He was all alone; whenever he reached out he simply touched the limitless void that surrounded him. A vague figure appeared in the distance, as the figure drew closer to him he saw that it was a young woman, no older than him. The woman walked up to Ayro and wrapped her arms around him, she and Ayro collapsed to the ground.

“You again?” Ayro asked “You said your name is Bastilla, my anscestor, right?”
“Yes” responded Bastilla.
“Why do you visit me?”
“Because you’ve lost your mother at such an early age, I will not have one of my children walk through the world alone without a mother.”

The two sat together when another person walked up to them, cloaked in black. Ayro shook in fear of being in his presence. Bastilla released Ayro and rose to her feet.

“Ugauco, why are you here?” Bastilla asked just before Ugauco inserted his lightsaber into her chest.

Ayro quickly sat up in his bed and looked around his apartment. While in his slumber, he was using his powers which made a mess of his apartment. For many nights he had that same dream, everyday he searched the archives but found nothing relating to his dream. His neighbor and Master Dajron walked in, stepping over the rubble. He stood at Ayro’s bedside looking down on him as Ayro gasped for breath.

“You saw her again?” Dajron asked
“Yes, Bastilla Shan, though something different happened this time, she was killed by a Sith named Ugauco.”

Being an expert on Ayro’s family history, Dajron knew who both people were but was far too tired to try and analyze an already complex dream.

The next morning there was little discussion between Dajron and Ayro. Dajron simply sat and watched Ayro do standard training drills while Dajron sat aside, deep in thought. He looked at Ayro and observed how skilled with a lightsaber he was for a mere Eighteen year old. Ayro deactivated his lightsaber when Grand Jedi Master Arme entered the room. The three Jedi exchanged bows.
“Dajron, young Ayro, I’m assigning you both a mission that has been requested by the Supreme Chancellor himself.” said Arme.
“What mission is this?” asked Dajron.
“Republic intelligence has reported highly suspicious activity on the planet of Manaan in the city of Ahto. Your assignment is to go and investigate.”
“With all due respect Master” Ayro said “Aren’t the Selkath neutral? If they catch us we will certainly be banned from ever returning”
“True, young Revan, upon your arrival you must avoid conflict as much as possible, only fight in self defense.” Arme commanded “now you must leave immediately, your transport awaits in the hangar.”

The Jedi exchanged bows again and Ayro and Dajron proceeded to board their transport. Upon arrival the Selkath greeted them with much distrust and reluctance. Though they were neutral it appeared that they barely tolerated outsiders.

“I sense a dark presence” Ayro stated.
“As do I, be wary and never let your guard down.” Dajron replied.

The two Jedi entered the main part of the city, to find it was crawling with Sith soldiers, Ayro reached for his lightsaber but Dajron stopped him.

“Ayro, don’t, the authorities will not tolerate it here only fight to defend on this planet” Dajron whispered.

Ayro slowly put his lightsaber on his belt. The two Jedi walked among the Sith, the only thing to protect them was the Selkath authority.

“We must find a way into the Sith embassy.” Dajron whispered.
“Yes, but how?” Ayro said pondering “we could Force Sprint into the embassy.”
“Ah, yes you are right.”

The Jedi both cast force speed which allowed them to speed by the Sith and enter the administrator’s office unnoticed. They were faced with a second obstacle, the Sith administrator. She stood at the desk pointing a Sith assassin pistol at Ayro and Dajron.

“Stop now and leave before I sound the alarm.” The young woman said.

Ayro slowly walked toward the administrator while Dajron stayed where he was and watched Ayro carefully. Ayro pulled the blaster from the woman’s hands using the Force. She grew nervous.

“Stop now or I’ll sound the alarm” The Administrator threatened.
“You don’t wish to sound the alarm, you may trust us” Ayro force persuaded.

The woman’s arms dropped to her sides and he eyes widened. “I don’t wish to sound the alarm, I may trust you” obeyed the woman.

“You wish to tell me what the Sith are doing on Manaan”
Still helplessly under Ayro’s control, the Administrator replied “I wish to tell you what the Sith are doing on Manaan. Nothing, the Sith are doing nothing on Manaan, my lord Darth Vailosis simply wished to lure a man named Ayro Revan into a trap.”

Ayro looked back at Dajron , who had a stern look on his face.
“You know Darth Vailosis is evil” Ayro force persuaded.
“I know Darth Vailosis is evil” the woman responded.
“You wish to desert the Sith and rethink your life”
“I wish to go home and rethink my life”

Ayro released the woman from his grasp, the woman shook her head and looked at Ayro and Dajron in a confused manner. She ran out of the Sith Embassy with her hand on her head.

“You know manipulation of peoples free will is not highly advocated” Dajron scolded.
“We needed information and to get her out of the way, and I couldn’t kill her” Ayro argued, his tone shifted “Well now that we know that this is a trap what shall we do?”
“Spring it.” Dajron smiled.

Ayro and Dajron opened the door and saw the room was filled with Sith soldiers. Without hesitation the soldiers fired upon the Jedi. The Jedi ignited their lightsabers and deflected the shots. Ayro flew forward and began to cut through the horde of soldiers. Once they were all dead the Jedi heard applause from a distance.

“Well done, well done,” applauded Darth Vailosis.

Ayro turned his head to see the Sith Lord that attacked him thirteen years ago. Ayro removed his cloak and faced the Sith. Another Dark Jedi walked from the opposite corridor towards Dajron.

“I applaud your resolve, Darth Revan II.” Vailosis smirked.
“My name is Ayro Revan” Ayro retorted swiftly.

The Dark Jedi force pushed Dajron back into the administrators’ office and locked the door behind him.

“Very well, I see you wish to have a repeat of last time.” Ayro boasted.
“We’ll see how far you get this time without your Master to help you”

Vailosis’ bionic hands spun his lightsaber and thrusted at Ayro, gracefully dodging the attack, Ayro got behind him and pushed him against the wall. Wasting no time Ayro leapt at the Sith and prepared to strike him down. The Sith parried the attack and rolled out of the way. Vailosis regained his footing and firmly stood in his stance.

“Why have you set this trap?” Ayro asked.
“Why do you ask questions to which you already know the answers?” Darth Vailosis responded.

Dajron slashed the door open and ran in to assist Ayro. Vailosis saw he was outmatched and vanished.

“Why would Vailosis set this trap and how did he know the council would choose us to go on this mission?” Ayro asked.
“Darkness surrounds this entire situation, we must report to the council” Dajron commanded.


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Some links to KOTOR and AOTC. I'm sure that the Administrator wasn't weak-minded. Also when Ayro is talking to her, he says lines from AOTC. I like this, keep posting.
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Chapter 7:

Darth Vailosis’ dark shadow stalked him down the corridor of the Embassy. A smirk appeared on his face as he pulled a small chip out of his robe. He entered his space vessel and vanished into the limtless vacuum of space. Sitting in the pilots chair he punched the communicator.

“Master,” Vailosis submitted.
“Ah, Lord Vailosis, you have succeeded?” answered an unnamed Sith.
“Indeed, upon my arrival we may achieve what we having been working so hard to accomplish for thirteen long years.”
“Good” the insidious Sith chuckled “bring it to me immediately.”
“Very good, my Lord” Vailosis said.

Meanwhile, back at the embassy, Ayro and Dajron rushed to erase the security recordings and make a narrow yet nimble escape from certain arrest. When the Selkath police arrived all they found were dead Sith and no trace of the Jedi. Ayro followed Dajron back to their ship with the uncomfortable feeling of bitter sweet victory crawling around his stomach. They entered their cruiser to find an uninvited visitor.

“You though you could brainwash me that easily?” the Sith administrator from before said angrily.
“Impressive, how did you manage to get onto our ship, and how did you break free from my Force Control?” Ayro asked.
“I realized that I had been taken control of when your Force Powers became sidetracked by another task. Then I decided I would hack into the Selkath hangar’s database and find your ship. I got the codes to it right here” the Sith soldier boasted as she removed a datapad from her pocket.
“Well it’s a good thing you managed to break free, I was planning on making you act like a crazed bantha, but I feel sympathetic for someone who has been robbed of independent thought.”

The Administrator grew furious and pulled out yet another Sith Assassin pistol and fired at Ayro, with a smooth wave of his lightsaber, the shot had been deflected.

“This is getting dull” Ayro stated and pulled the blaster from the woman’s hands. He deactivated his lightsaber and Dajron reached for the handcuffs inside the cabinet. The woman’s arms were restrained behind her and she was escorted to the cargo hold, the doors were locked to prevent all hope of her escape.

“It appears that my powers of persuasion have been overestimated” Ayro chuckled.

“This is no laughing matter, Ayro. This could be apart of an elaborate Sith plot. I want you to go into the cargo hold and keep a close eye on her, if she shows the slightest bit of Force knowledge…. Kill her.” Dajron commanded.
Ayro jumped back in shock but saw Dajron was serious, he went back into the cargo hold and kept a close eye on her. They didn’t speak for a while until the woman finally spoke out.

“Are you the one named Ayro Revan?”
Ayro looked at her and nodded.
“You don’t look as powerful as Vailoisis says you are”
“Perhaps I’m not, but looks can be deceiving” Ayro responded “What is your name?”
“I have no reason to tell some Jedi trash like you”
“Hmmm…. Angry and blind, I guess that’s why I couldn’t completely control you, the Sith got to you first.”
She gritted her teeth and took a deep breath.
“My name is Faye, Faye Daveis”
“Why did you join the Sith?”
“Don’t get too cozy, Jedi” said Faye “You are lucky enough you got my name, let alone my past”
“Very well”

The ship exited hyperspace and they made a safe touchdown inside the temple hangar. Ayro was holding Faye’s restrained arms as Dajron closely followed. The Jedi responded in shock at the appearance of a Sith soldier inside their sacred temple. Arme quickly approached them.

“A prisoner?” Arme asked.
“Yes, a Sith administrator” Dajron responded.
“Good, the council will question her later, did you find out what the Sith were up to?”
“Yes master, it was a mere trap set for Ayro, nothing else. My guess is that Darth Vailosis was either trying to kill or capture him”
“Possible, but I think this plot runs deeper than a mere assassination attempt.”

Arme looked at Ayro and saw his right arm was cut.

“This is new, a wound on you, Ayro” Arme observed.
“Carelessness, nothing more” Ayro replied.

The Jedi Master escorted Ayro, Dajron and Faye into the temple and put Faye into confinement.

Vailosis arrived on the Sith mother ship. He walked into the throne room and dropped to his knees.

“Good, now we may begin” said the Sith Master.
“Yes, Lord Turmoin” replied Vailosis.


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A great Chapter. I knew that the Sith Woman would eventually break out of that Force persuade. What are the Sith doing? I can't wait to see more.
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Chapter 8: Ayro walked through the cells of the republic prison. His life was fairly mundane after his mysterious mission that took place on Manaan three months ago. The only relatively exciting thing he had to do was to question Faye, as assigned by the council. He walked down the corridor and came upon Faye’s cell.

“Eat Kath Hound fodder, Ayro, I am not answering anything” Faye scoffed.
“Nice to see you too Faye, this is my luck, the only person I can talk to that’s my age is a prisoner.” Ayro chuckled sarcastically.
“Why do you always come and ask me these questions when I’ve told you I’m not answering, you Jedi are too lenient in your methods of interrogation”
“Ah, I see, you’d rather be tortured, as the Sith do things?”

Faye bit her lip and tears filled her eyes/

“Strike a nerve, did I?” Ayro asked “its okay you can tell me.”

Faye tried to resist telling him but succumbed to her sorrow.

“My father was a senator in the Republic, he lost faith and became a Sith officer, when my mother, my brother, and I refused to join the Sith tortured us into submission”
Faye cried.
“They brainwashed you, didn’t they?” Ayro asked.
“You don’t know, so stop acting like you do.”
“Very well”

Ayro looked around the room and then sat down on the bench behind him and grazed his thumb along the marking on his let cheek.
“It’s not your fault, Faye” Ayro told her.
“Why do you have those markings?” Faye said, desperate to change the subject.
“I’m not sure, nobody in my family had them” Ayro responded “Who was your father?”

Faye sat down beside him and said:

“Bemidect Daveis, he was senator until two years ago.”
“What happened in your torturing sessions?” Ayro asked.
“Why are you asking such personal questions?”
“Don’t take it personally, I am simply asking what Dajron told me to ask.”
“No, I will not tell you” Faye stated, then her voice changed into a scratchy insidious, bone chilling tone. “She will not tell you”

Ayro noticed a change in her voice and looked at her to see her pupils had vanished from her eyes.

“Ayro Revan” said the ominous voice.
“I was growing tired of waiting, so I am borrowing one of my soldier’s bodies for a brief time.”
“Who are you?”
“I am the person who was always right behind you and miles away at the same time, I am the one person who understands who you are, and the monster inside of you.
My name is Darth Turmoin, I’m sure you’ve met my apprentice, Darth Vailosis.”
Ayro ignited his lightsaber and stood up to face his nemesis. Turmoin stood up and smacked Ayro.
“That was for thinking I’d fight you, no this is a warning to you. Know that every person in the Sith army could be me. Fear me, respect me, we will meet face to face soon enough.”
Fayes green pupils returned as well control of her body, tears once again filled her eyes and she grabbed her head.
“He won’t leave me alone!” Faye yelled.
Ayro put his hands on Faye’s shoulders and looked into her eyes.

“I believe there is something that you forgot to tell me?” Ayro asked.

Faye looked down at Ayro’s feet then up at his face, torn allegiance and confusion tormented her already tortured mind.

“Who is Darth Turmoin?” Ayro asked “If you seek help it would be wise to tell me”
“Turmoin is the Dark Lord of the Sith, two years ago when I joined the Sith, rather when my father did, after my will had been broken from countless hours of torture. They gave me a shot, it sent a chip into my bloodstream that they said went up to my brian, ever since then I would blank out and then when I regained consciousness, I’d find that I committed the most horrible acts imaginable. I don’t know what happens to me!”

Faye dropped to the ground; Ayro knelt and held her up to his chest. Then he found himself in the white void that he was in during so many of his nightmares.

Wait, what am I doing? This is forbidden, but I can’t just let her suffer. Ayro thought. He looked at Faye to realize that he was no longer holding her; he was holding his ancestor, Bastilla Shan. Ayro quickly let go of her and shot up onto his feet. Bastilla looked Ayro straight in the eye and said

“It’s alright; don’t be afraid, love is what saved me from the Dark Side”
“But, the code” Ayro bumbled back.
“Don’t be afraid, love isn’t the path to the Dark Side, it’s what saved me from it.”

Ayro’s acute hearing picked up the hum of a lightsaber and then snapped back into consciousness, now his dream was beginning to make sense. He looked up to where the hum was coming from.

“Assassin, the Sith are getting clever” Ayro whispered to himself.
“What?” Faye sniffled.
“Listen to me, I’m going to release you” Ayro stated.

Faye simply nodded and Ayro rose to his feet and shot Force Lightning up into the top right corner of the cell, out of the dark corner fell a man dressed in an all black suit wielding a short red lightsaber. Ayro ignited his lightsaber and raised it above his head, preparing to deal the final blow just as the assassin sprang back on his feet and parried the attack.

“I’m not after you!” the assassin said “Let me go, and no harm will be dealt to you, it’s the girl that I’m after”
“I don’t think that I’m the one who needs to worry about getting harm dealt to” Ayro boasted.

Ayro lunged at the assassin, the assassin parried but to far near the hilt of his blade. Ayro stroked his lightsaber upwards and he cut the lightsaber in half. In a desperate attempt to finish his assignment, the Sith assassin fired Force Lightning around Ayro and at Faye. In a flash Ayro deactived his lightsaber and Force pushed the lightning into the walls. The assassin cowered in fear.

“You, you aren’t mortal!” the assassin shrieked. Ayro activated his lightsaber and struck the final blow to the Sith.

Darth Turmoin erupted in anger when he learned the assassin failed.

“D**n it all! That was my best assassin!” Turmoin shouted.
“M’Lord what would you have me do?” Vailosis responded.
“Send out a squad of assassins, with our finished product inside of them, the prototype must be destroyed.” Turmoin commanded.


Top 5 Guitar Heroes:
1.Frank Zappa (solo)
2.Jimi Hendrix (Jimi Hendrix Experience)
3.Eric Clapton (Yardbirds, John Mayall and the Bluesbreakers, Cream, Blind Faith, Derek and the Dominos, Solo)
4.Jimmy Page (The Yardbirds, Led Zeppelin, Solo)
5.Slash (Guns N' Roses, Slash's Snakepit, Velvet Revolver)


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Revans Bloodline:http://www.lucasforums.com/showthrea...85#post2026685

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