Tick. Tick. Tick. The time wouldn't stop, but it felt like the space around him was coming to an end. Colin had fallen asleep, grabbing the straps in the drab, gray seats and strapping into one. He drowzily slumped over, dragging himself to the controls. His fingers slowly shook downwards, resting on the dashboard. The Pelican drifted to a halt. The engines were running low, they were hungry and tired, and floating through endless space. A flash ran across the silver visor. "What the?"
"Nothing. Just going outta my mind," he explained to himself, pulling the comm switch,"this is ODST Sergeant Major Johnathan Anthony. Cut the chatter and listen up. Distress signal code 6-8-M-A-G-5-9-9-3-8-6-H-H-G. A little long, or maybe off, but we're stranded. The Code Seven annhilated and we are lost after the Extraction Setup. We were not picked up. I repeat; WE WEREN'T GOD-DAMN PICKED UP."
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A red-haired man wearing a gray uniform slowly strolled over to the console. "Put it on. Do a full scan of who-ever sent it."
"Yes, sir!"
The younger, dark-brown haired soldier flicked switches and handled the controls. Pushing the button reading Recieve, a short flicker crossed the room. Then another. Finally, a cracked picture of an ODST appeared. A voice recording played,"This is...jor Johna...thony. Cut the cha...isten up. Dist...nal code...8-M-A-G-5...9-3-8-6..H-G. A little long, or maybe off, but we're... The Code Seven an...we are lost after the Ex...tion Setup. We...cked up. I repeat; WE WEREN'T GOD-DAMN PICK..."
Casey, the Officer playing the recording, stared at the screen. "Captain...I think we found them."
Interesting, very intersting. And I mean that in a good way. This has peaked my curiosity as to how SMG Anthony can to be in this predicament, and where his story will lead. You are discriptive, which is good, though I would reccommend making the chapters a bit longer. For these two is worked out fine, but when you get into the beef of the story, I reccommend lengthening them.
I'll keep my eyes pealed for updates. Keep on writiong!
This is continued from Extraction Setup which should have in the Jedi Archives about two months ago... but it's stuck in the second or third page of the CEC. Kinda wierd...but yeah, you might want to check that out. I have a suprise for people who have read it. Just a heads up!
This has peaked my curiosity as to how SMG Anthony can to be in this predicament, and where his story will lead. You are discriptive, which is good, though I would reccommend making the chapters a bit longer. For these two is worked out fine, but when you get into the beef of the story, I reccommend lengthening them. 
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